This is my first attempt at a short story. Kindly read and leave me your valuable comments:
“Why don’t you buy something to gift her?” asked his friend. “Don’t you want to show how much you love her?”
They were all shopping for gifts either for themselves to carry as souvenirs of the trip or to gift it to their loved ones. The weather was typical of the place – misty and cloudy with chilly winds blowing across the hill. Seenu’s friend had just bought a namesake gift in the name of his latest infatuation and was not even sure whether he would gift this to that girl. This made the question more ironic.
What would Seenu reply to that? Did he not want to show Shaila how much he loved her? Did he not have enough money to buy that elusive gift which would show how much he cared for her and how much he thought of her? Could he not have bought some little ornamental thing and pass that off as his gift to her? Why was he simply staring at the shop and meandering around while the rest were busy buying something for their loved ones?
He was just lost in his own world. Since the time he had set foot on that hilly terrain, he had realized that he would miss Shaila. He would miss her every moment during the trip. It was the perfect spot for couples wanting to be together. It had everything – the pleasant weather, romantic locations, and cozy little cottages, and wide walkways, sights of the lush green mountains, milky waterfalls, and occasional tender drops of rain. This kind of weather would make everyone long for a companion. His case was no different. And the fact that he had gone there with his office friends and the unexpected last minute changes in the trip made things even worse for him. He just tried not to think of her much and enjoy as much as possible with his friends. But her memories kept coming back…
The weather was part sunshine, part cloudy and part rainy. It was the same kind of weather when Seenu had first told Shaila what he felt for her. He just told her how much he loved her and wanted her as his companion. She had responded by telling that she would stay with him forever, and that no matter what happened, she would always love him. Too bad, the situation did not allow him to take her with him this time. The setting of the place was very similar to “Cloud Nine” – as wonderful as the lyrics of the popular Bryan Adams’ hit song:
When the moon is bright and the stars are out…
Whatever comes it’s gonna be alright…
cos’ tonight you will be mine- up on cloud number nine…
The rain came down in small droplets, each little droplet reminding him of her sweet, innocent looks. The fresh breeze from the mountains carried her fragrance. The sound of the mountain birds carried her melodious voice. The white misty peaks reminded him of her pure love for him. She was just everywhere that he saw. He just wanted to be with her so badly. And yet, that was the only thing he could not do…
How could he express his love and care for her? Could a small ornamental gift fully express what he was feeling for her? Could some costly present fully carry the enormous emotions that were rushing through his heart at that moment? He looked at all those items and just decided against buying anything. Someday, he would gift himself to her. He would dedicate his entire life for her happiness. He would take her to that very place and ask her to choose whatever she wanted from the entire lining of shops. He would try and fulfill all her wishes. Because she was the most precious gift that god had given him and he would spend the entire life in trying to make her feel like a queen.
It was then that he answered his friend who asked the question, “Nothing is worth her!” He meant it.
Disclaimer : All characters are fictional. Lyrics from the song by Bryan Adams. Producer : Bryan Adams
“Why don’t you buy something to gift her?” asked his friend. “Don’t you want to show how much you love her?”
They were all shopping for gifts either for themselves to carry as souvenirs of the trip or to gift it to their loved ones. The weather was typical of the place – misty and cloudy with chilly winds blowing across the hill. Seenu’s friend had just bought a namesake gift in the name of his latest infatuation and was not even sure whether he would gift this to that girl. This made the question more ironic.
What would Seenu reply to that? Did he not want to show Shaila how much he loved her? Did he not have enough money to buy that elusive gift which would show how much he cared for her and how much he thought of her? Could he not have bought some little ornamental thing and pass that off as his gift to her? Why was he simply staring at the shop and meandering around while the rest were busy buying something for their loved ones?
He was just lost in his own world. Since the time he had set foot on that hilly terrain, he had realized that he would miss Shaila. He would miss her every moment during the trip. It was the perfect spot for couples wanting to be together. It had everything – the pleasant weather, romantic locations, and cozy little cottages, and wide walkways, sights of the lush green mountains, milky waterfalls, and occasional tender drops of rain. This kind of weather would make everyone long for a companion. His case was no different. And the fact that he had gone there with his office friends and the unexpected last minute changes in the trip made things even worse for him. He just tried not to think of her much and enjoy as much as possible with his friends. But her memories kept coming back…
The weather was part sunshine, part cloudy and part rainy. It was the same kind of weather when Seenu had first told Shaila what he felt for her. He just told her how much he loved her and wanted her as his companion. She had responded by telling that she would stay with him forever, and that no matter what happened, she would always love him. Too bad, the situation did not allow him to take her with him this time. The setting of the place was very similar to “Cloud Nine” – as wonderful as the lyrics of the popular Bryan Adams’ hit song:
When the moon is bright and the stars are out…
Whatever comes it’s gonna be alright…
cos’ tonight you will be mine- up on cloud number nine…
The rain came down in small droplets, each little droplet reminding him of her sweet, innocent looks. The fresh breeze from the mountains carried her fragrance. The sound of the mountain birds carried her melodious voice. The white misty peaks reminded him of her pure love for him. She was just everywhere that he saw. He just wanted to be with her so badly. And yet, that was the only thing he could not do…
How could he express his love and care for her? Could a small ornamental gift fully express what he was feeling for her? Could some costly present fully carry the enormous emotions that were rushing through his heart at that moment? He looked at all those items and just decided against buying anything. Someday, he would gift himself to her. He would dedicate his entire life for her happiness. He would take her to that very place and ask her to choose whatever she wanted from the entire lining of shops. He would try and fulfill all her wishes. Because she was the most precious gift that god had given him and he would spend the entire life in trying to make her feel like a queen.
It was then that he answered his friend who asked the question, “Nothing is worth her!” He meant it.
Disclaimer : All characters are fictional. Lyrics from the song by Bryan Adams. Producer : Bryan Adams
8 comments:
It was very nice, cute and very sweet. :)
I understand you are in love !!!
Some time ago, I used to ponder on such stuff and write at length about my feeling through such stories, a few poems and what not..In fact I made an entire blog :)
Perhaps when thinking about all this we'd be alone, and we just write to express our feelings..
But yeah, times move and I've grown out of it..
I hope you dont.. Stay there, as its an amazing feeling. Hope you do get your girl :)
and yeah a good post :)
How ironic that when we desperately want to be with someone, we can't be with them!! You've captured the emotion really well dude, keep up the amazing writing!
Shashi,I can completely empathise with what you have written!Some people are just beyond material gifts.I loved the line where you say you will gift yourself to her.
Few are the people who are blessed to feel emotions as pure and as exhilarating as love.
All the best,Shashi.Lovely post!
@Tg_
Thanks a lot for reading and commenting :)
@Vishnu
Thank you for your insights and experiences about the wonderful feeling called love. Keep visiting man!
@Ravi
Exactly man! Most of the times, the things which we desire will be out of our reach
@Akka
Thanks a lot for your comments, akka. Could not agree with you more :)
Very well written Shashi. Like the way you have put the words together. Although you keep arguing that those are not your feelings and its about your friend, we know that you are in love. Cherish the moments, its a beautiful feeling to be in love. I wish you get that gal and visit Kodai again with her :)
u ve expressed ur emotions really well shashia...! sooper... reminded me chetan bhagat's "two states"... and also our very own " thunthuru alli neera haadu...".. thanks ! and keep it flowing...
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